What happens when we think beyond the dotted line

[Fliptastic29]

To find what is, one must understand what was. The answer remains inside a box we refuse to open. A can unopened, a mason jar unscrewed. Light is something we construe, in an attempt to bring an illusion of happiness within our lives. Thus justifying our "so called" ... "actions" into retrospect. A green youth mixed with red passions all encircled by black intentions...

[Hannibal]

"A green youth mixed with red passions all encircled by black intentions..."

Throw out the rest, and build off of that.

In my opinion that was the best part of the peice.

The rest (to me) just sounded like you were trying WAY to hard to sound 'deep', and it just ended up sounding kinda corny, and really didn't make any sense. But I did like that last line, and I think something should be built on that.

[Fliptastic29]

agreed....i just wrote that a long time ago....just thought the end sounded well....glad you enjoyed the part i was really into. [img]smile.gif[/img]